Some educators believe that every child should be thought how to play musical instruments. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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apply

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musical

instruments

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in schools.

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it is a commonly held belief that

children

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should be

thought

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how to use different types of musical

instruments

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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that it is

bad

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thing to teach

children

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musical

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with, learning the sciences and engineering will be better for

children

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, these fields are countries' future and

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can be made by their hands.

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, sciences will help them

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their knowledge and

improving

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improve

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their soft skills ,

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as creativity, critical thinking, and

problem solving

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, there are many countries like Saudi Arabia , and Qatar

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tend

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to alter their

education's

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education

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plans by developing and updating

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education

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subjects. Another point to consider,

children

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do not have

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an interesting

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interesting

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in musical

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. It is

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possible to say that they always prefer staying in

comfortable

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place

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noisy

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one.

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, some families do not allow

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apply

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thier

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their

children

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learning

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to learn

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playing

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play

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with musical

instruments

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, most

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Arabic countries do not listen to songs and do not care about

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them

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because of

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religious

reasons. In conclusion,

despit

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despite

people having different views. I believe that the governments should invest in

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the educational

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system , since it is a crucial sector and

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to build

success

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future.

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, they should increase awareness about the importance of

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subjects.

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Oct 30, 2023

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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239 words

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