Some educators believe that every child should be thought how to play musical instruments. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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There is no denying the fact that
engaged
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musical
instruments
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in schools.
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it is a commonly held belief that
children
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should be
thought
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how to use different types of musical
instruments
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, there is
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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that it is
bad
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thing to teach
children
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musical
instruments
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.
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with, learning the sciences and engineering will be better for
children
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.
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, these fields are countries' future and
it
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can be made by their hands.
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, sciences will help them
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their knowledge and
improving
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their soft skills ,
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as creativity, critical thinking, and
problem solving
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.
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, there are many countries like Saudi Arabia , and Qatar
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that tend
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tend
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to alter their
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plans by developing and updating
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education
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subjects. Another point to consider,
children
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do not have
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an interesting
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interesting
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in musical
aspect
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. It is
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possible to say that they always prefer staying in
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place
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in
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one.
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, some families do not allow
to
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thier
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their
children
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learning
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or
playing
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play
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with musical
instruments
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.
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, most
of
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Arabic countries do not listen to songs and do not care about
it
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them
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because of
religous
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religious
reasons. In conclusion,
despit
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despite
people having different views. I believe that the governments should invest in
educational
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the educational
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system , since it is a crucial sector and
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to build
success
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future.
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, they should increase awareness about the importance of
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subjects.
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