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On one hand, nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. On the other hand, nuclear weapons are a potent threat to world peace. Do the benefits of nuclear technology outweigh the risks? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In the current
world
, with improvements in
technology
, nuclear
power
 stands as a double-edged sword, providing both benefits and risks. It is debatable whether nuclear
technology
 is a blessing or,
on the other hand
, whether it is a potential threat to the
world
. If nuclear
technology
 is used in a proper way, it will benefit the betterment of the
world
.
This
 essay will discuss both views and derive a logical conclusion.
Technology
 is improving daily with the high demand for
power
 in the
world
. Since fossil fuels are depreciating from the earth, there is a need for a supply of
power
 to match the demand. Nuclear
power
 is a great alternative to address the issue of
power
 demand.
However
, it is considered to be the cheapest source of
power
 to provide with minimal environmental damage. Most developed
countries
 use
this
 method to provide an uninterrupted
power
 supply for consumers.
On the other hand
, many
countries
 use nuclear
power
 as a weapon for
war
. After
World
War
 II, most of the leading
countries
 used
this
 method to destroy cities by threatening
world
 peace.
For instance
, incidents
such
 as Cherynoble
and
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Hiroshima, and Nagasaki killed thousands of innocent civilians and destroyed the bio diversity. The effects of radiation are still in place even after many years of these accidents. It proves how nuclear
power
 can turn into a disaster and create adverse effects on the entire human race and the habits in the
world
. As another example,
countries
such
 as India, China,
USA
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 and Russia are competing and testing to maximize their nuclear warheads. It can result in
world
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World War
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war
 III anytime soon. In conclusion, the supply of nuclear
power
 should be increased
due to
 the decline of natural energy. Using nuclear
power
 can eliminate the carbon emissions generated by fossil fuels.
Therefore
, nations around the
world
 should focus on generating
power
 from these methods rather than turning the
world
to
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 a
war
 ground.
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Ensure that the essay fully addresses the prompt and explores both the benefits and risks of nuclear technology.
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Improve the organization of the essay to enhance coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the lexical resource.
grammatical range
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and strive for more complex sentence structures.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear power
  • Cheap and clean energy
  • Nuclear weapons
  • Threat to world peace
  • Benefits
  • Risks
  • Potent threat
  • Deterrence
  • Security
  • Accidents
  • Disasters
  • Misuse
  • Balancing
  • Strict regulations
  • International cooperation
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