The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the medium change per month in the fees of Copper, Zinc and
Nickel
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from January to December 2014.
Overall
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, In the first month,
Nickel
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had a big difference with Copper and Zinc
while
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, in the
end
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end,
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they were almost similar
with
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apply
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together.
Also
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,
Nickel
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had the most fluctuation in all of them throughout the year. On the one hand,
according to
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the graph,
While
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at the beginning of the year the
Nickel
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's price was the highest (6%), it was the
least
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lowest
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in June (-3%) because it decreased sharply during that time except March to May.
Furthermore
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, it rose to 1 per cent in July and levelled off until September. After a slight plummet, it rocketed to 1% and
then
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remained constant.
On the other hand
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, Copper and Zinc have the same trend. They have just about similar starting values with 1 and 2 respectively in January.
Moreover
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, they have the like amounts in the
last
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month.
Finally
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, these two metals have fewer oscillations than
Nickel
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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