The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates the medium change per month in the fees of Copper, Zinc and
Nickel
from January to December 2014.
Overall
, In the first month, Nickel
had a big difference with Copper and Zinc while
, in the end
they were almost similar Add the comma(s)
end,
with
together. Change preposition
apply
Also
, Nickel
had the most fluctuation in all of them throughout the year.
On the one hand, according to
the graph, While
at the beginning of the year the Nickel
's price was the highest (6%), it was the least
in June (-3%) because it decreased sharply during that time except March to May. Correct word choice
lowest
Furthermore
, it rose to 1 per cent in July and levelled off until September. After a slight plummet, it rocketed to 1% and then
remained constant.
On the other hand
, Copper and Zinc have the same trend. They have just about similar starting values with 1 and 2 respectively in January. Moreover
, they have the like amounts in the last
month. Finally
, these two metals have fewer oscillations than Nickel
.Submitted by omranz2013 on
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