The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates the medium change per month in the fees of Copper, Zinc and
Nickel
from January to December 2014.
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Overall
, In the first month, Linking Words
Nickel
had a big difference with Copper and Zinc Use synonyms
while
, in the Linking Words
end
they were almost similar Add the comma(s)
end,
with
together. Change preposition
apply
Also
, Linking Words
Nickel
had the most fluctuation in all of them throughout the year.
On the one hand, Use synonyms
according to
the graph, Linking Words
While
at the beginning of the year the Linking Words
Nickel
's price was the highest (6%), it was the Use synonyms
least
in June (-3%) because it decreased sharply during that time except March to May. Correct word choice
lowest
Furthermore
, it rose to 1 per cent in July and levelled off until September. After a slight plummet, it rocketed to 1% and Linking Words
then
remained constant.
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On the other hand
, Copper and Zinc have the same trend. They have just about similar starting values with 1 and 2 respectively in January. Linking Words
Moreover
, they have the like amounts in the Linking Words
last
month. Linking Words
Finally
, these two metals have fewer oscillations than Linking Words
Nickel
.Use synonyms
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