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The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#population #india #china #year #growth #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The information
of
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in
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chart
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the chart
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 provides the
amount
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number
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 of seals, whales and dolphins
decumented
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documented
 in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018.
Overall
, there was
a
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 increase in the
numbers
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number
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 of
this
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these
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fishs
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fish
, with
quantity
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the quantity
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 of dolphins
witnessed
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witnessing
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 a significant rise throughout the period.
In addition
, seals and whales experienced a
flutuation
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fluctuation
 in the middle phase. Beginning of the duration, the dolphins had about 18 individuals in 2006, before dramatically
grow
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growing
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 to over 50 in 2018 and became the type
fish
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of fish
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had
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that had
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 the most. About 42 seals
recorded
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were recorded
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 in
this
 nation in 2006, with a strong unsteadiness in the first eight years and a final
climbe
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climb
climbed
 from around 35 in 2014 to 45 in 2018.
Similarly
, the figure for the whales fluctuated in the range from nearly 22 to 25 from 2006 to 2010, followed by a mild decrease to 21 in 2014 and
the end
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ended
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 at 28 in the final year.
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