Traffic congestion is a growing problem in many of the world’s major cities. Explain some possible reasons for this problem, and suggest some solutions.

Nowadays, most of the people from rural
countries
and areas move to big
cities
looking for better opportunities.
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life in developed
countries
are
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better compared to
the
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life in remote destinations
due to
various benefits. Tourism developments, Better employment opportunities, higher
standard
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standards
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of education, living standards, financial stability and social advantages are some of the reasons for urbanisation. In my aspect, urbanisation is the
the
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most common problem for
the
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traffic
congestion in many major
cities
.
Due to
financial and political instability in many developing
countries
, most of the Individuals tend to move to another
country
or a
city
for their betterment.
For instance
, the reason why a student from a
third world
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country
want
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to invest
on
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a standard higher education in a developed
country
is because quality of the education those
countries
provide. They believe it can
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added to their career life rather than doing a local course or a degree in their nation.
Therefore
, thousands of students move to different
cities
around
world
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and it causes
a
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infastructure related
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issues
mainly
traffic
and
transport related
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problems. Arrivals of
higher
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number of tourists and
over population
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in the
cities
are
also
another reason for
traffic
issues
.
On the other hand
, even though urbanisation can benefit
economy
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of that
city
or the
country
, it is not always practical to face
traffic
conjestion
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congestion
daily basis.
Traffic
congestion is another reason
to
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the
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to
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air quality which can lead to air pollution and a huge threat
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the
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bio diversity. As per my perspective, it is paramount that these
issues
are
addresses
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and can be mitigated by introducing a proper
traffic
management system.
The people
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should be encouraged to travel by public transport
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the
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public transport must be developed in a way
its
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more comfortable and less expensive for passengers to travel around rather than
traveling
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in their personal vehicle.
Furthermore
, improving facilities
such
as
park
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and
ride
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rides
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,
introducing
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the
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traffic
problems and
as well as
reduce environmental impacts. In conclusion as
per
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my view, the government or the municipal council should take necessary actions addressing
such
issues
before welcoming more people to their
city
. The
amentities
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amenities
and
infastructure
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infrastructure
should be developed in a way to reduce these types of
issues
. A
city
should be pleasant and easy to live in and should not feel like living in
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hell.
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