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On one hand, nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. On the other hand, nuclear weapons are a potent threat to world peace. Do the benefits of nuclear technology outweigh the risks? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Notions about nuclear
power
 have been always a conflict since the beginning.
While
 some people consider
the
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nuclear
power
 as a clean and less expensive
source
 of
energy
, others indicate
about
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it about
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 potential threat to
world
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the world
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. I believe in the latter belief, and in
this
essay
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essay,
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 I will explain why the risks of nuclear
power
outweitgh
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outweigh
outweighs
 the advantages. Considering mostly preferred
energy
 sources like fossil fuels, oil and
colar
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coal
, the impact of these
energy
 sources on our climate has been becoming increasingly worse
recent
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in recent
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 days.
As a consequence
 of
common
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their common
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 usage
of
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apply
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them
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them,
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 we face devastating effects of climate change,
imcluding
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including
 rising sea
level
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levels
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,
unpredictable
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and unpredictable
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 weather. These
amendmends
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amendments
 are resulting in numerous negative
change
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changes
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,
such
 as water shortage,
loss
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and loss
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 of crops, in the long term .
However
these kind
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this kind
these kinds
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 of resources are limited,
we
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and we
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 are likely to face price
spike
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spikes
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 frequently.
For instance
, oil prices have risen remarkably for the
last
 five years.
On the other hand
, nuclear
power
 has been represented as a clean
energy
source
 since they have no disposal
waste
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of waste
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 like smog which
emits
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is emitted
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 when coal burns.
Furthermore
, because
of
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nuclear
enery
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energy
 comes from
atom
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atoms
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, it can
consider
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be considered
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as
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a limitless
source
 so may be cheaper
tham
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than
liited
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local
 resources like oil and coal.
However
, there is a devastating risk about nuclear
power
, which is a tiny mistake or distraction
may
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that may
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 lead to
long-lasting
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a long-lasting
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 harmful impact on
environment
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the environment
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.
For example
, since
a
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the
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 accident in
Chernobil
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Chernobyl
, people who
live
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lived
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 around the factory died in pain and their children suffered from
long-lasting
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the long-lasting
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effect
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effects
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 of
this
 accident.
Moreover
, the land around the factory
becamed
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became
 infertil,
as
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and as
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 a
result
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result,
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 local people lost
their
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the
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 huge amounts of income which
comes
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came
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 from
agricultiral
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agricultural
 activity. In conclusion,
while
the
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nuclear
power
 has positive sides, I find it very risky for our world’s future
,
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 and believe
in
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that
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 the dangers of
the
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apply
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nuclear
power
outweitgh
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outweigh
outweighs
 the advantages. With
this
 perspective, I defend that until
scientist
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scientists
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invent
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 a new and
indanger
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in danger
endanger
endangered
enery
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energy
source
, we should limit our consumption of current
enery
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energy
 sources.
Additionally
, governments should support factories
for
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in
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 changing their
energy
source
 toward renewable ones like wind, hydropower or solar.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear power
  • Cheap and clean energy
  • Nuclear weapons
  • Threat to world peace
  • Benefits
  • Risks
  • Potent threat
  • Deterrence
  • Security
  • Accidents
  • Disasters
  • Misuse
  • Balancing
  • Strict regulations
  • International cooperation
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