The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Answer this task in 150 words at least.
The diagram demonstrates the
percentage
of both male and female Australian citizens, who exercised regularly in 2010.
From an Use synonyms
overall
perspective, young Linking Words
men
(between 15 and 24 years old) are the most Use synonyms
age
group to exercise among all males. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, older women (an average of 50 years) play sports more consistently than younger ones.
Observing the details, the Linking Words
percentage
of males keeps fluctuating all over the Use synonyms
age
groups. In fact, Use synonyms
men
start exercising regularly at a young Use synonyms
age
, but Use synonyms
then
in older Linking Words
age
groups, Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
percentage
decreases till it reaches 45.1% after it was 52.8% in the beginning. Surprisingly, when Use synonyms
men
are 65 and over, they do sports more often. Use synonyms
That is
why we can see that the number starts to rise again to 46.7%.
Women are completely the opposite; the Linking Words
percentage
of those who exercise is the smallest for both these Use synonyms
age
groups: (15 to 24) and (65 and over). Use synonyms
In other words
, females start with a low Linking Words
percentage
- 47.7%. Use synonyms
Then
, Linking Words
this
number keeps climbing steadily until it reaches a peak of 53.3%, followed by a mild decline to 47.1% in the final Linking Words
age
group. In conclusion, the chart stresses an important point, which is simply that Use synonyms
men
's behaviour is opposite to that of women.Use synonyms
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