The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Answer this task in 150 words at least.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Answer this task in 150 words at least.
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The diagram demonstrates the
percentage
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of both male and female Australian citizens, who exercised regularly in 2010. From an
overall
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perspective, young
men
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(between 15 and 24 years old) are the most
age
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group to exercise among all males.
On the other hand
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, older women (an average of 50 years) play sports more consistently than younger ones. Observing the details, the
percentage
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of males keeps fluctuating all over the
age
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groups. In fact,
men
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start exercising regularly at a young
age
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, but
then
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in older
age
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groups,
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percentage
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decreases till it reaches 45.1% after it was 52.8% in the beginning. Surprisingly, when
men
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are 65 and over, they do sports more often.
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why we can see that the number starts to rise again to 46.7%. Women are completely the opposite; the
percentage
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of those who exercise is the smallest for both these
age
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groups: (15 to 24) and (65 and over).
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, females start with a low
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- 47.7%.
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,
this
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number keeps climbing steadily until it reaches a peak of 53.3%, followed by a mild decline to 47.1% in the final
age
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group. In conclusion, the chart stresses an important point, which is simply that
men
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's behaviour is opposite to that of women.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, men, age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age groups
  • Percentage
  • Gender comparison
  • Leisure time
  • Health awareness
  • Bar chart
  • Work-life balance
  • Life stages
  • Engagement
  • Motivation
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Public health policy
  • Fitness programs
  • Data analysis
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