The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Answer this task in 150 words at least.
The diagram demonstrates the
percentage
of both male and female Australian citizens, who exercised regularly in 2010.
From an overall
perspective, young men
(between 15 and 24 years old) are the most age
group to exercise among all males. On the other hand
, older women (an average of 50 years) play sports more consistently than younger ones.
Observing the details, the percentage
of males keeps fluctuating all over the age
groups. In fact, men
start exercising regularly at a young age
, but then
in older age
groups, this
percentage
decreases till it reaches 45.1% after it was 52.8% in the beginning. Surprisingly, when men
are 65 and over, they do sports more often. That is
why we can see that the number starts to rise again to 46.7%.
Women are completely the opposite; the percentage
of those who exercise is the smallest for both these age
groups: (15 to 24) and (65 and over). In other words
, females start with a low percentage
- 47.7%. Then
, this
number keeps climbing steadily until it reaches a peak of 53.3%, followed by a mild decline to 47.1% in the final age
group. In conclusion, the chart stresses an important point, which is simply that men
's behaviour is opposite to that of women.Submitted by menagouda24 on
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