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The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library to find out the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library to find out the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie graphs
displays
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 the findings
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 from
a
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research carried out by a Library in a University on how happy the Full-time and Part-time
students
 felt about their opening hours and IT support in 2008.
Overall
,it is evident from the chart that,most of the
students
 were very happy with both the opening hours and IT support.
To begin
 with,Concerning
the
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IT support,
while
majority
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 of the full-time
students
 were very satisfied at 55%,Just a minority of the part-time
students
of
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about 20% were very happy.
However
,a similar percentage of 32% and 35%
in
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 Full-time
students
 and Part-time
students
 respectively were quite happy and a larger proportion of Part-time
students
 were not happy at all when compared to the
full time
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students
.
Furthermore
,In terms of the present opening hours,Both categories of
students
 were very pleased,with just a minimal proportion of less than 6% in both
expressed
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 themselves to be not happy at all.
In addition
, 32% and 23% of
Full -time
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Full-time
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 and Part-time
students
 respectively were quite satisfied as well.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • university library
  • full-time students
  • part-time students
  • opinions
  • services
  • satisfaction
  • comparison
  • satisfaction levels
  • different library services
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