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The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library to find out the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library to find out the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie graphs
displays
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 the findings
gotten
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 from
a
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research carried out by a Library in a University on how happy the Full-time and Part-time
students
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 felt about their opening hours and IT support in 2008.
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,it is evident from the chart that,most of the
students
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 were very happy with both the opening hours and IT support.
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 with,Concerning
the
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IT support,
while
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majority
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the majority
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 of the full-time
students
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 were very satisfied at 55%,Just a minority of the part-time
students
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of
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about 20% were very happy.
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,a similar percentage of 32% and 35%
in
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 Full-time
students
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 and Part-time
students
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 respectively were quite happy and a larger proportion of Part-time
students
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 were not happy at all when compared to the
full time
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full-time
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students
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.
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,In terms of the present opening hours,Both categories of
students
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 were very pleased,with just a minimal proportion of less than 6% in both
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 themselves to be not happy at all.
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, 32% and 23% of
Full -time
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Full-time
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 and Part-time
students
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 respectively were quite satisfied as well.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • university library
  • full-time students
  • part-time students
  • opinions
  • services
  • satisfaction
  • comparison
  • satisfaction levels
  • different library services
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