Crime rate, in most countries, is often higher in urban areas than in rural areas. Why do you think that is? What can be done to reduce the crime rates?

In today's modern era,
crime
rates have risen, despite increased security . It is often observed that the violation of laws frequently occurs in highly populated areas rather than poorly
populated
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. Rising unemployment rates and the use of drugs are among
few
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the few
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causes of it . Improving criminal laws and enforcing social security to ensure all
inhabitants
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inhabitant's
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safety can be
ephasized
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emphasized
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on
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to
decreased
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these misconduct.
To begin
with, the number of misconducts each year is rising alarmingly, which in
majority
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the majority
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occurs
due to
lack
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a lack
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of enough jobs available for people. Greater anonymity and no social cohesion
makes
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it easier for
the
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criminals to commit these crimes
along with
easier availability of various
presciption
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prescription
drugs.
For example
, when a highly aspirant
invidual
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individual
lives in a city, their dreams to become
a highly skilled individual declines
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a highly skilled individual decline
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due to
saturation of the positions and
hence
force them to pursue these illegal activities.
Therefore
,
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number
of
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believe that implementing policemen, who are highly skilled in their
respectice
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respective
areas will improve
the
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security and provide reassurance
the
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general public.
Furthermore
, creating more work opportunities will aid in
decline
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of poverty which will
further
reflect on lower
crime
rates.
For instance
, The United Arab
Emiates
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Emirates
have applied stricter punishments,
hence
the country has been proven to be among the safest countries in the world.
Thus
,
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goverment
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government
governments
play
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a major role in
flourishing
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the
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nation. In
cocnlusion
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conclusion
, to curb the urban
crime
levels
promoting
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awareness and enthusiasm towards making a nation
crime free
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crime-free
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zone, each and every individual has to take
responsiblity
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responsibility
to abide
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by the policies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime rate
  • urban areas
  • rural areas
  • population density
  • anonymity
  • social cohesion
  • social disintegration
  • poverty
  • unemployment
  • demand for drugs
  • illicit activities
  • infrastructure
  • employment opportunities
  • police presence
  • community policing
  • social engagement
  • education
  • vocational training
  • youth involvement
  • support programs
  • rehabilitation
  • recidivism
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