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On one hand, nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. On the other hand, nuclear weapons are a potent threat to world peace. Do the benefits of nuclear technology outweigh the risks? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In today's contemporary
world
, Nuclear
energy
sources
 and Nuclear
weapons
 are
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debatable and
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controversial
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 among people. On one side, many people are in favour of
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nuclear
power
sources
 as they are
more
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cheaper and non-polluted
energy
sources
.
However
, on
flip
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 side, many folks believe that nuclear
weapons
 are
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 potential threat to
world
 peace. In
this
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viewpoints and give my opinion. To commence with
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 positive effects of the nuclear powers around the globe.
Firstly
, nuclear
power
 stations provide sustainable and reliable
energy
sources
.
Moreover
, Nuclear
power
 is not only
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 but renewable
energy
sources
.
In addition
, nowadays, we have witnessed a drastic and enormous advancement in the
world
 of technology and industries
due to
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 of Nuclear
power
. Thereby,
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 industries from
agricultural
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 to construction or high-speed trains to space missions,
human
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humans
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 are progressing and achieving higher standards of milestones to live
modernize
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life
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.
However
, Nuclear
weapons
 are
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 potent threat to the survival of the
earth
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 population. At present time,
majority
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 of the countries have
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power
 of
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nuclear
weapons
 or
misailes
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missiles
, which are enough to destroy all mankind on the earth.
Furthermore
, in today's time, many conflicts and disputes happen between two countries, which often lead
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 situations of
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war.
Hence
, during
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war time
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,
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humanity
are
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 at
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great risk
due to
 threats of
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nuclear
weapons
. The side effects and radiation after the nuclear blast will be horrifying for many generations. The
world
is still not forget
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 the horrifying nuclear blast on Hiroshima and Nagasaki by
USA
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.
Citizen
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Citizens
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 of these regions are still suffering from the effects of the
radiations
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radiation
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amd
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and
 many babies have
genetical
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 deficits. In conclusion, nuclear
power
 is the boom for the revolution in the technological
world
,
however
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 it is one of the biggest
threat
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threats
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for
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 humankind and
world
 peace.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear power
  • Cheap and clean energy
  • Nuclear weapons
  • Threat to world peace
  • Benefits
  • Risks
  • Potent threat
  • Deterrence
  • Security
  • Accidents
  • Disasters
  • Misuse
  • Balancing
  • Strict regulations
  • International cooperation
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