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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies for young people in some countries. It is undeniable that having a little bit of leisure time has become an essential part of our life.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies for young people in some countries. It is undeniable that having a little bit of leisure time has become an essential part of our
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. One of the main aspects of the problem is that parents are coercing their children to do things that they do not want. In a large number of situations, parents reject the youngster's opinion, thereby
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 the forceful method to implement and impose
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, what they should do.
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free time for themselves and private activities
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 can contribute to physical and mental burnout.
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an excessive amount of academic pressure will be stressful for minors.
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 can lead to stress or make them feel uncomfortable in society. Because
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 they cannot find a topic to communicate with others and it will be difficult for them to make friends. To tackle
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 concern, people must make a rational decision,if their children will do
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 that learning can be interesting.
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, when you are satisfied with yourself.
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 hobbies. Having weighed everything mentioned up, we can come to a
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 result could be stressful, if you
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 not stop to
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 children.
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