Write a letter to your manager to request setting up a cafeteria for the the staff in your letter , you should tell: What you heard about the inconveniences from the staff How you feel bout it What suggestions you have

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Dear Mr, David, I am writing

the

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letter regarding

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setting up a

cafeteria

for the staff

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want to tell you about some facing the problem in

cafeteria

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the cafeteria

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, sometimes we have no enough space for the

costumors

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costumers

customers

due

lacking

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to a lack

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of chairs and

table

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tables

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Also

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and Also

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facing some

issue

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issues

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about

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the air conditioner. I would like to tell you

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heard some

rumors

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rumours

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from the staff about

mismanagement

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the mismanagement

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cafeteria

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the cafeteria

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Also

, regarding the quality of

food

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the food

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As well as

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saw some staff stand and eat the food

beacuse

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because

we have no proper equipment. When

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saw

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feel embarrassed. My humble request please provide us proper

equipments

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equipment

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and fix the new air conditioner I will suggest

you

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apply

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you will do all

cafeteria

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the cafeteria

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renovations so

you

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your

costoumrs

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customers

increase day by day and if you provide

good

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quily of food

then

costoumrs

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customers

will be

attracte

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attracted

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them. I hope you will

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think about it. I am looking forward to hearing from you and expecting

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kind of cooperation. Yours sincerely, Ali

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task response

Ensure to address the task prompt more directly and provide specific examples of inconveniences faced by the staff in the cafeteria.

coherence cohesion

Maintain logical progression of ideas throughout the letter and consider organizing the information into distinct paragraphs.

lexical resource

Expand the range of vocabulary used, particularly by using more precise and varied expressions to describe the inconveniences and suggestions.

grammatical range

Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to ensure clear and accurate communication.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
31Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

172 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Write a letter to your manager to request setting up a cafeteria for the the staff in your letter , you should tell: What you heard about the inconveniences from the staff How you feel bout it What suggestions you have

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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