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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table below illustrates how
people
Use synonyms
 in
UK
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the UK
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 spent their time in leisure
last
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 year.
Overall
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, we can see that data there compare activities by gender and part of the day in percentage. The most common activities of unemployed
people
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 are housework,shopping and job hunting it is predictable to see that women spend most of their time doing housework,
while
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 males
spent
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spend
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to
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apply
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job hunting The proportion of morning men who do gardening watching TV and reading is higher more than
proportion
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the proportion
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 of morning women who do the
sarne
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same
.Regardless of sex and part of
day
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the day
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people
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 do drinking least of all Gardening of
male
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males
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 in
afternoon
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the afternoon
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 and morning has
similar
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a similar
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 percentage. showing 14 and 13
percent
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per cent
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To
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In
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 contrast in the afternoon
people
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 visit friends or relatives.watch TV and read more than in the morning
Due to
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 most of all
stay
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staying
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 in bed in the morning Zero
percent
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per cent
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 of women play
sport
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sports
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 and stay in bed in the afternoon, that shows
big
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a big
the big
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 difference between two gender
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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