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Schools should use films, computers and games instead of books. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#schools #films #computers #games #books
First and foremost, if we look at the development of the surroundings, it will be seen that almost everything has evolved
besides
 state schools. People try to ease
the
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life
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 by changing
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, schools need to be listed, but they are likely will be skipped. In the way of illustration, for more than thousands of
years
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 teaching techniques have not changed.
In addition
, books can be replaced with tablets or laptops.
Moreover
, films can be given as home
assignment
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 for several subjects and the same can be applied
for
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 computer games.
Thus
,
this
 alteration might be a challenge to achieve, but can lead to
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live
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 in general.
Last
 but not least,
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 significant alterations can be a cause for children
to begin
 to think differently. To be more precise, most of the pupils will approve of
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 changes and
this
 can result in
better
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 understanding of technology.
For instance
, we live in a digital age where tech skills have
vital
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 role in our lives
due to
over reliance
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 on gadgets.
Furthermore
, initial acquaintance with technology will improve children's
tech-savvynes
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tech-savviness
tech-savvy
. In the repercussion, it will be easier to get used to the up-to-date environment. In conclusion, as it was previously mentioned, I am sure that
education
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 system must be changed in order to prepare students for
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an appropriate
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 new-fashioned
life style
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.
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task response
Ensure that your introduction clearly presents your position on the topic and provides a roadmap for your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas in a logical and coherent manner, making sure each paragraph has a clear topic and supporting sentences.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary by using more precise and varied words and phrases.
grammatical range
Pay attention to your sentence structure and grammar to ensure accuracy and complexity.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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