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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside town of Brinslow between 1990 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside town of Brinslow between 1990 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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All the changes the Brinslow town has seen during a
15 year
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15-year
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 interval
is
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are
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 depicted by these maps;
overall
,
dominate
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dominant
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 alternations have
been
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occurred in order to develop and modernize the city which made it more residential.
To begin
, one prominent change is expanding the railway that
at
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in
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 2005 was sketched along the coast.
Also
, a ferry was built on the southwest corner just close
the
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to the
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 railway.
At
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 the west side of the city, all the trees were cut down in order to develop more accommodation including
airport
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 located near the river and a built factory above the new railway.
Also
, the school and the hospital were still at the same place. Regarding the east region, mostly all the trees and houses were demolished to be converted into flats and a
super market
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supermarket
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 at the
center
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centre
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 of
east
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the east
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 section.
According to
 the map, a series of flats have been lined along the off-street and the other flats were located around the lake near the main road.
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