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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habitis in five Austrlian cities

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habitis in five Austrlian cities
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The graph represents the results
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the
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coffee
 and
tea
 buying habits in five cities in Australia. The result of a survey about
people
's habits in
major
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the major
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 five cities of
Austrlia
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Australia
.
Overall
, the
habitis
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habits
habitus
 of
people
varies
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vary
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 for a week.There is a rapid increase and decrease in the
habitis
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habits
 of
people
. In detail, There are five cities in
Austrila
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Australia
 namely Sydney, Melbourne ,Brisbane , Adelaide ,
Hobart
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and Hobart
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. The percentage of
city
 residents is from 20% to 62%. The
people
 of
Sydney
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in Sydney
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city
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bought
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who bought
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 fresh
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4
weeks
 is nearly
about
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43% ,
people
 in Sydney
city
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 bought
majority
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the majority
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 of fresh
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4
weeks
whereas
 other
city
people
 bought less.The percentage of
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the hobart
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hobart
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Hobart
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 community buying instant
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4
weeks
 has raised nearly to 54%,
instead
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people
 refused to buy fresh
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4
weeks
 was more
overally
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overall
less
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apply
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and
people
 of Hobart
city
 prefered to go
for
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to
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a cafe
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cafe
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cafes
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 for
coffee
 or
tea
was
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high in
last
 4weeks it was 62%.
The
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city
 of
Adeladia
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Adelaide
 and Brisbane
people
 started to buy fresh
coffee
 in lesser
quantity
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quantities
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, members of
the
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apply
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both
city
 bought
instan
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instant
coffee
 and
people
 went to the
cafe
 was literally
simliar
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similar
.
People
 in
the
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Melbourne
city
 went to
cafe
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a cafe
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 for
coffe
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coffee
 or
tea
in
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last
 week was 64%
nearly
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, it is the first
city
 of members who went to a
cafe
 for
coffee
 or
tea
. There was
slight
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a slight
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 increase
between
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in
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 the
people
bought
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who bought
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 instant
coffee
 and bought fresh
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4
weeks
.From the given chart we would say that
people
prefere
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prefer
 to go to
cafe
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a cafe
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 for
coffee
 or
tea
is
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apply
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more compared to
other
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others
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, people, city, weeks, cafe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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