Write about the following topic: Some people believe that schools should reward those students who show excellent academic performance while some believe that only the ones who show significant improvement in the grades should be rewarded. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, some
students
are
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achived
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achieve
a good
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good grades
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grades
after
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hardworks
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work
. Certain people think that
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insititute
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institute
should reward those
students
who show brilliant academic
performace
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performance
while
some believe that only the
ibes
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best
who show significant improvement in
the
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grades
should be rewarded. In
this
essay, I will discuss both views and explain them.
Firstly
, I am
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with
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point. When the schools
given
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to
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a reward for good
grades
to
students
then
it helps motivate
for
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him
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them
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and
for
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other
students
. They are doing more
hardwark
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hardware
hard work
in
study
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the study
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and
try
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to better marks in
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the exam
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exam
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exams
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.
For example
, as per a report by BBC News,
US
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the US
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government started
last
year new program for
students
when they are achieved above
than
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apply
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90 % marks in
12th
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the 12th
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examination
then
, they
are providing
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the scholarship and
also
wave-off the fees
of
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further
higher studies, so the
reasult
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result
after
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passing rate is increased more than 30% from the
last
years.
On the other hand
, when they are focusing on
that
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those
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students
they have
given
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made
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significant improvements in the examination. If the
students
trying to
own
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level up from the past
years
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year's
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results
then
it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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of schools and class teachers to
encarge to
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encourage
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them and
rewards
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reward
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for
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them for
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this
performace
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performance
.
For instance
, as per a survey by
Times
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of India of the report, when
start
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this
activity in the schools given
the
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apply
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rewards
for
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apply
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a
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apply
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significant
students
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number of students
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then
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the
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literacy rate is increased
the
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in the
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coutry
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country
70
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by 70
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% to 90%
from
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in
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the
last
one
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decades. In conclusion, we have discussed both views and found both are equally important, good
grades
students
and show a significant improvement in
grades
. When they are rewarded for better performance
and
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they will be motivated and encouraged for
future
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the future
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. If the student is doing good
then
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the country
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country
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country's
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future is always better, because
students
are
future
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the future
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of the nation.
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