3-3 Youth unemployment is increasing in many countries in the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures can be taken to solve it?

Nowadays, the financial crisis has impacted
in
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different areas.
For example
, the unemployment rate of youth has
increasing
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in many nations. Personally, I think there are several reasons which lead to
this
situation, and several solutions will be mentioned in
this
essay. The main reason for young people is that there is not enough
job
position in the companies. Each year, there are numerous
of
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university
students
who graduate from the same major,
however
, the
job
demand in a company is far less than
this
number.
For example
, in Taiwan, there are around three
hundreds
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of
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students
become
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physiotherapist
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looking for
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each year, but a clinic or a hospital only need around ten therapists.
As a result
,
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more jobs not only can solve
this
issue but
also
can
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provide more health
service
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to
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normal people.
Furthermore
, the graduated
students
prefer
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apply
certain
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of
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occupation
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. For
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, plenty of
students
prefer to choose business or engineering as their major, after they graduate, all of them will apply to the same position or company which
contribute
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to the overload of the
job
application. In my opinion, encouraging various types of
profession
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professions
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to change people’s
job
preference
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preferences
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.
For example
, if the government
put
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more funds
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tourism,
then
students
will have more interest in tourism which have a great development and brighter future. In conclusion, not enough
job
position
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positions
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and too many
job
applications in the same occupation contribute to the
raising
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unemployment of youth.
Nevertheless
, I believe
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more opportunities and
promote
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the variation of
career
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careers
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can diminish the ratio of
the
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unemployment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Educational mismatch
  • 2. Labor market
  • 3. Economic downturn
  • 4. Recessions
  • 5. Automation
  • 6. Technological innovation
  • 7. Displace traditional jobs
  • 8. Catch-22 situation
  • 9. Outsourcing
  • 10. Labor market policies
  • 11. Minimum wages
  • 12. Job protection laws
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