3-3 Youth unemployment is increasing in many countries in the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures can be taken to solve it?
Nowadays, the financial crisis has impacted
in
different areas. Change preposition
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For example
, the unemployment rate of youth has increasing
in many nations. Personally, I think there are several reasons which lead to Wrong verb form
increased
this
situation, and several solutions will be mentioned in this
essay.
The main reason for young people is that there is not enough job
position in the companies. Each year, there are numerous of
university Change preposition
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students
who graduate from the same major, however
, the job
demand in a company is far less than this
number. For example
, in Taiwan, there are around three hundreds
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hundred
of
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students
become
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who become
are
looking for Unnecessary verb
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job
each year, but a clinic or a hospital only need around ten therapists. Add an article
the job
a job
As a result
, create
more jobs not only can solve Wrong verb form
creating
this
issue but also
can
provide more health Verb problem
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service
to Fix the agreement mistake
services
the
normal people.
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Furthermore
, the graduated students
prefer
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prefer to
certain
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to certain
of
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occupation
. For Fix the agreement mistake
occupations
in stance
, plenty of Correct your spelling
instance
students
prefer to choose business or engineering as their major, after they graduate, all of them will apply to the same position or company which contribute
to the overload of the Correct subject-verb agreement
contributes
job
application. In my opinion, encouraging various types of profession
to change people’s Fix the agreement mistake
professions
job
preference
. Fix the agreement mistake
preferences
For example
, if the government put
more funds Wrong verb form
puts
in
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into
the
tourism, Correct article usage
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then
students
will have more interest in tourism which have a great development and brighter future.
In conclusion, not enough job
position
and too many Fix the agreement mistake
positions
job
applications in the same occupation contribute to the raising
unemployment of youth. Correct your spelling
rising
Nevertheless
, I believe create
more opportunities and Wrong verb form
creating
promote
the variation of Wrong verb form
promoting
career
can diminish the ratio of Fix the agreement mistake
careers
the
unemployment.Correct article usage
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