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The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.

The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.
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The line graph compares the
figure
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figures
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 of
people
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 in the USA who worked in different sectors from 1975 to 2025. It can be observed from the line graph that the
number
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 of
people
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 engaged in the agriculture
sector
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 decreased over a period of 50 years. In 1975, the majority of
people
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 chose the agriculture
sector
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, with approximately 80
million
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. The figure remained stable until 1977. In the following years, the
number
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 of
people
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 fell dramatically to around 10
million
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.
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, there were around 10
million
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people
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 employed in the service
sector
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 in 1975. By 2025, the
number
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 of
people
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 working in the service
sector
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 had increased steadily to 90
million
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.
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, the figure of
people
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 who worked in the manufacturing
sector
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 was consistently lower than others.
This
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also
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 rose steadily until 1980, and
then
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 rapidly declined to 10
million
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 over the following 45 years.
In addition
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, every
sector
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 had the same quantities in 1980, around 40
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number, sector, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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