The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table and pie chart
shows
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above
is
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the data
of
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on
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Police
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the Police
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Budget
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&
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and allocation
Allocation
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for 2017 &
2018
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and 2018
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. The table shows
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Police
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the Police
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budget
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on
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for
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2017 &
2018
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and 2018
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and its sources,
while
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the pie chart
present
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the spending
allocation
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of the
budget
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.
According to
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the table, there are 13.9m increases
on
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in
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police
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the police
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budget
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. The increases mainly came from National Government and Local Taxes funds. Both
2017
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the 2017
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and 2018
budget
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funding percentage shows similar results. In 2017,
National
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the National
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Government supported around 60% of the
police
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budget
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that year,
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local taxes and other sources supported
for
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30% and 10% of the
budget
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respectively. Meanwhile, for
2018
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the 2018
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budget
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, National Government funded around 56% of the whole yearly
budget
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, followed by local taxes
who
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contributed
for
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apply
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32% and other sources
who
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contributed
for
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to
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12% of the whole
police
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budget
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in 2018 Meanwhile, the pie chart shows the
allocation
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of the
police
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budget
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in 2017 and 2018. There are 3 main
allocation
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of the
budget
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, which is salaries for officers and
staffs
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staff
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, technology, and building and
transports
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transport
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. Both
2017
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the 2017
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and 2018
allocation
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is
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mainly for salaries, which
taking
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75% and 69% of the
budget
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.
While
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salaries
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salary
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allocation
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dropped, technology
allocation
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increased from 8% in 2017 and 14% in 2018. Building and transportation
remain
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remained
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the same in 2017 and 2018 with
17
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a 17
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%
allocation
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from the yearly
budget
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, allocation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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