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In many parts of the world girls and boys are educated together in co-educational or mixed schools. Some people think that girls and boys benefit from being educated separately in single-sex schools. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Co-education has been seen as the mainstream education in the world, in the context of which some parents see the alternative form of school---single-gender schooling.They strongly approve
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 their children there. In my opinion, I support
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education
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 both genders.
Firstly
, co-education is more
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effective
. As we know, there are more co-educational
schools
 than single-sex ones,which means that they are more
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 for parents to choose
schools
 for their kids.
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, it is easy for students to make friends with others
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 another gender in
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.
Secondly
, male and female students learn how to build
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relationship
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 with each other. To be specific, they study and
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collaborate
 together every day, during which they learn the
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collaboration
 skill
that is
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beneficial
 to their future work. In conclusion,
schools
 with boys and girls are the mainstream
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 in the world. They provide equal and friendly educational
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 for every family.They are productive. Though
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single-gender schooling is
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 education system,they are going to society with both genders. They have to face the real world.So they must learn the related skills from
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co-educational
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task response
Your essay addresses the task by discussing the benefits of co-education. However, you could have provided a more balanced view by acknowledging the arguments in favor of single-sex schools.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. However, the overall structure of your essay could be better. Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single main point and the ideas are logically connected.
lexical resource
You have used a range of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and repetitions. Be more precise and use synonyms to avoid repetition.
grammatical range
Your grammatical range is sufficient, but there are some errors in verb agreement and tense consistency. Review your grammar rules and proofread your essay to eliminate these errors.

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