In many parts of the world girls and boys are educated together in co-educational or mixed schools. Some people think that girls and boys benefit from being educated separately in single-sex schools. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Co-education has been seen as the mainstream education in the world, in the context of which some parents see the alternative form of school---single-gender schooling.They strongly approve

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their children there. In my opinion, I support

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education

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both genders.

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, co-education is more

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effective

. As we know, there are more co-educational

schools

than single-sex ones,which means that they are more

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for parents to choose

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for their kids.

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another gender in

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, male and female students learn how to build

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with each other. To be specific, they study and

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together every day, during which they learn the

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collaboration

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beneficial

to their future work. In conclusion,

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with boys and girls are the mainstream

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in the world. They provide equal and friendly educational

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for every family.They are productive. Though

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single-gender schooling is

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education system,they are going to society with both genders. They have to face the real world.So they must learn the related skills from

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co-educational

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Your essay addresses the task by discussing the benefits of co-education. However, you could have provided a more balanced view by acknowledging the arguments in favor of single-sex schools.

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1Word repetition
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17Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Fully explain your ideas

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