The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. IELTS Bar Chart

The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

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These charts
shows
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show
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the changes
of
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in
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the
employments
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employment
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in the United Kingdom between 1988-2012.
Overall
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, the charts
presents
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present
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some
soaring
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soar
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in the
women
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's
percent
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per cent
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and a normal
increasing
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increase
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in the
men
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's
percent
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per cent
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Firstly
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, the
women
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category, who is working
for
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apply
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a
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apply
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full-time gets
soaring
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soared
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from 19% to 26%;
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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then
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the
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numbers
gets
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get
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higher from 4,482 to 7696;
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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the
women
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with
the
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apply
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part-time jobs
gets
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get
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a
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apply
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unnoticed
increasing
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increase
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with 2%, In the other hand the
men
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with
a full-time jobs
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full-time jobs
a full-time job
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gradually goes down 53% in 1988 to 49% in 2012,
while
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the
part time
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part-time
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men
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gets 1%
overall
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these years.
Secondly
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,In 2012,
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while
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apply
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the
women
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's category
increases
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increased
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sharply but with a small
percent
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per cent
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26%
The
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apply
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men
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goes
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go
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in
the
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apply
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second place in the developing but the biggest number 53%, the total shows the big step
the
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apply
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The
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apply
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UK's population
takes
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has taken
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on
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in
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working individually with
a numbers
Correct the article-noun agreement
numbers
a number
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from 23,839 to 29,600.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment
  • sectors
  • workforce
  • fluctuations
  • significant change
  • stability
  • percentage
  • growth
  • decline
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • overtook
  • remained stable
  • data
  • analysis
  • overtake
  • comparative
  • comprehensive
  • substantial
  • marginal
  • chart
  • interpretation
  • industries
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