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The charts below show the number of people in Europe who were affected by four types of noise by day and by night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the number of people in Europe who were affected by four types of noise by day and by night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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show
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 the amount of
European
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Europeans
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 who were impacted by noise level by time of
day
 in urban and rural
areas
 in 2017.
Overall
, it is readily that people living in cities
had
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have
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 to endure
more
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a more
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 noisy atmosphere than residents in the countryside.
In addition
, the most noisy factor came from traffic. As we can see, traffic annoyed 64
millions
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million
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 during the
day
 and 48
millions
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million
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 people at
night
 in cities.
This
 figure for
rulral
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rural
areas
 was nearly
a
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apply
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half as high as urban ones.
Turnning
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Turning
 to the responsibility for
train
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trains
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, the number of individuals who were disturbed by
this
 type of transportation by
day
 and by
night
at
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in
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 cities was 10
millions
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million
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 and 8
millions
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million
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, respectively. In suburb
area
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areas
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, that was
slighly
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slightly
 lower (
8millions
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8 million
 and 6
millions
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million
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). Aircraft and Industry were
remarkablely
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remarkably
 less noise disturbance in both
areas
 in 2007. In urban
areas
, just 4
millions
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million
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 by
daytime
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the daytime
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 and 1 million citizens
by
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at
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night
 time heard the sound from aircraft. On behalf of rural
areas
,
this
 figure accounted for 2
millions
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million
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 during the
day
 and the same amount at
night
 as urban ones. Industry barely caused noise for
European
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Europeans
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 in the countryside and made up a little amount
at
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in
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city
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the city
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 ( from 0.25 to
1million
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1 million
 in a
day
 )
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Vocabulary: Replace the words day, areas, millions, night with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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