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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The design below shows the floor plan of a central library 20 years ago and how it looks nowadays. At the first look, we see that tables were removed, and some of the rooms became bigger and have
a different shapes
Correct the article-noun agreement
different shapes
a different shape
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.
Room
Correct article usage
The room
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on
Change preposition
in
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 the left corner where
CD’s
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CDs
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 and videos used to be, became bigger and
replace
Wrong verb form
replaced
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to
Change preposition
with
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children
Change noun form
children's
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 books and storytelling events. On the right corner
enquiry
Correct article usage
the enquiry
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 desk was removed and replaced by a cafe.
In the
Change preposition
The
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 same corner
room
 with children’s books became the lecture
room
 and remained the same despite other ones.
Computer
Correct article usage
The computer
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rooms
Change the noun form
room
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 entry changed and it became
reading
Add an article
a reading
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room
.
Overall
, the library remained the same except
of
Change preposition
for
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Correct article usage
the rooms
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rooms
Fix the agreement mistake
room
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 shape and
Correct your spelling
what was
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whats
Correct your spelling
what's
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 inside
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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