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A magazine wants to include contribution from its readers for an article called 'the book that influenced me most". Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influences you most. In your letter, describe what this book was about, explain how this book influenced you, say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

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Dear sir: I am writing to the editor of
this
 magazine to contribute with my reading experience from a
book
 which has a positive impact on my life. The
book
 called
the
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art
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 of not giving a fuck)
for
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 the American writer Mark Manson .The
book
 non
fiction
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a fiction
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 self -help
book
 . it covers
the
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mason's
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Mason's
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believe
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 that life's struggles ,give it meaning and
also
 argues that the typical help self-help
book
 offers meaningless and positivity Neither helpful nor practical ,
thus
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an improperly
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 Approach for
most
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individual
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individuals
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 face . It offers me
a creative ways
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creative ways
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 of ‏Thinking to
facing
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the
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life's challenges And how
deal
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 with
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problems by intelligent methods.
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, the most essential part
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book
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 about( don’t give our problems
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huge
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 in our lives)
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on
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me a lot; because
,
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it’s really speak
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it’s really speaking
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 about my facing’s I believe
this
book
 could help different people essentially the youngest
one
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ones
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 who
have
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 not enough
experiences
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experience
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 in
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live
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. Thank you for your attention. Yours faithfully.
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task response
Ensure that all parts of the prompt are addressed in the letter.
coherence cohesion
Organize the ideas in a more logical order to improve coherence.
lexical resource
Expand the vocabulary and use more varied and precise language.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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