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The chart below show the males and females arrested over 5 years and the reasons for the most recent arrest.

The chart below show the males and females arrested over 5 years and the reasons for the most recent arrest.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of men and
women
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 who were arrested in five years ending in 1994,
whereas
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 the bar chart represents the reasons for most recent
arrest
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arrests
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.
Overall
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, it can be noted that the percentage of males who were arrested was higher than females by around four times.
Moreover
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, public drinking was the main reason why both
them
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 were arrested. Regarding the pie charts, it can be seen that the rate of
male
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males
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 who were caught was 32% compared to females which was 9%. By looking at the bar graph, it can be noted that a majority of
women
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 were caught because of public drinking which was over 35%,
while
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 the number of males was around 30%.
Similarly
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, the rate of assault was higher among
women
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 than men at less than a fifth (18%) and more than 15% respectively.
On the other hand
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, when it comes to
drink
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drinking
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 driving, the rate of men
was
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being
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 arrested
at
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apply
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was 26%, which
two
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is two
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 times
hinger
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higher
 than
women
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.
Likewise
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, the figure for
bridge
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the bridge
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 of order, theft and other reasons was higher among
man
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men
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 compared to
women
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. Around 8% of females and 4% of males did not give the answer for the reason why they were arrested.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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