The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The
given
pie chart illustrates the proportion of men and women who Verb problem
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work
in three different majors such
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as
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Service
, Agriculture
, and Industry between countries A and B
.
In general, it is noticeable that,
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service
is the most attractive career for both males and females while
those in country
, B
dominate the other. In addition
, there was a tiny fraction of agriculture
in country
B
while
the opposite was true for country
A.
In detail, in terms of country
A, 56% of their male staff work
in service
, followed by the percentage of male workers who work
in agriculture
29% . A similar separation was seen in the figure for female workers serving in service
and agriculture
was 49% and 43% respectively.
In country
B
, the figures for male and female employment in service
-related jobs are the most significant, at 65% and 88% respectively. On the other contrary, both males and females only accounted for a small percentage of agriculture
5% compared to 1%. While
male and female work
in industry accounted for 32% and 11% .Submitted by phongnguyenthanh630 on
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