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The line chart illustrates the amount of money in US dollars paid on cars in China, Vietnam, Thailand, and Indonesia from the years 1995 until 2005.

The line chart illustrates the amount of money in US dollars paid on cars in China, Vietnam, Thailand, and Indonesia from the years 1995 until 2005.
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 line chart
gievs
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gives
 us
informations
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information
pieces of information
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 about the
amount
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 of
money
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spend
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spent
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 on
books
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 in four
country
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countries
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from 1995 to 2005 ,
overall
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 it can be seen that people were more interested
to buy
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books
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 . refers to some
countrys
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countries
that
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such
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 as Germany and
france
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which
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 citizens were spent more
money
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 rather than
tow
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two
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others country
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, humans in
germany
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started
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to
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spend
money
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 on
books
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 stood at 1995
by
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at
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 80
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millions
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million
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 dollars
that
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was
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were
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 a higher
levels
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level
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 of
total
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the total
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amount
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 which followed by
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an
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increase
steadly
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steadily
steady
untill
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until
 1999 at 90
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millions
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million
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 dollar
then
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 during
teh
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the
 period 1999 to 2005
this
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amount
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 rose gradually
untill
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until
 below 100 one hundred
mellions
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millions
million
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amount
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 for spending
money
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 in
france
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France
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that started at
pver
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over
 50
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millions
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million
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, over the period
incresed
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increased
gradualy
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gradually
. regarding 2
others
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other
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countrys
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countries
. in
italy
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Italy
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there was
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a steadly
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steadly
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steady
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 increase in 1995
ot
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to
 60 million
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 dropped to 50 million after 4 years
this
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amount
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was
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rose to over 60
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millions
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million
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,
however
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 in Australia which stood at 30
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millions
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million
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thet
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there
 was a lower
amount
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 of spending on
books
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the
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followed by
jumped
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, books, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line chart
  • amount of money
  • paid on cars
  • China
  • Vietnam
  • Thailand
  • Indonesia
  • 1995
  • 2005
  • significant increase
  • highest amount
  • steady growth
  • lowest overall spending
  • started at
  • doubled
  • nearly
  • reached
  • exceeded
  • among
  • half a billion dollars
  • conclusion
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