The line chart illustrates the amount of money in US dollars paid on cars in China, Vietnam, Thailand, and Indonesia from the years 1995 until 2005.

The line chart illustrates the amount of money in US dollars paid on cars in China, Vietnam, Thailand, and Indonesia from the years 1995 until 2005.
The given line graph
illustrate
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the expenditure on
books
in four European countries from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the amount of money which
spended
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spent
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on reading materials increased in the all given countries, over the whole time frame. Looking more closely at Germany, where the expenditure on
books
was far exceeded than the others throughout the period, 80
millions
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million
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dollars
spended
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spent
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for
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on
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books
in the year 1995, and
this
figure reached
at
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nearly 92
millions
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million
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dollars
in 2005. Turning to France and Italy, whose figures were so similar
in
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at
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the
beginnig
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beginning
of the period at around 50
millions
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million
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dollars
,
and
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both of these figures increased.
While
spended amount of money in France
rise
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constantly, between 1995 and 1999
saw
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a fluctuation in Italy
then
rose gradually until 2005. In terms of Australia, which had the lowest expenditure on
books
in 1995 at 30
million
dollars
, steadily increased by 1999 and represented
in
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40
million
dollars
,
then
remained stable at
this
level in the following two years. From 2001 to 2005 witnessed a remarkable
rising
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and
this
figure rocketed from 40
million
dollars
to just above 70
million
dollars
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, dollars, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line chart
  • amount of money
  • paid on cars
  • China
  • Vietnam
  • Thailand
  • Indonesia
  • 1995
  • 2005
  • significant increase
  • highest amount
  • steady growth
  • lowest overall spending
  • started at
  • doubled
  • nearly
  • reached
  • exceeded
  • among
  • half a billion dollars
  • conclusion
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