Some people think schools should rewards students who have the best academic results, while others think it's more important to reward student who achieve other types of success (such as sports, music and good behaviour). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Schools
should be an environment where every student
feels included. Not every student
in school is academically gifted or receive
straight A's. Correct subject-verb agreement
receives
some
of them are better at socializing, sports, art, and using their right brain. The way Capitalize word
Some
schools
reward their students
in both aspects can tell us so much on
how inclusive they are.
Change preposition
about
Academic
plays Fix the agreement mistake
Academics
such
a big role in Add an article
the students
students
school Change noun form
students'
student's
career
. Fix the agreement mistake
careers
Schools
that give rewards for high achieving
Add a hyphen
high-achieving
students
can be a major motivation, but it's not that special. The stigma around a scholars
academic score has always been positive. when a Change noun form
scholar's
student
is able to do math
, science, and more complex subjects that Add an article
the math
involves
Correct subject-verb agreement
involve
left brain
dominance they are viewed as smarter than their peers who are better at sports or art. They get rewards in different forms, Add a hyphen
left-brain
such
as praises
, scores, and labels from society. Being book smart could Fix the agreement mistake
praise
also
lead to getting accepted into top notch
universities, Add a hyphen
top-notch
scholarship
awards, and open them up to a wider range of career paths.
Correct word choice
and scholarship
Although
academic is important, some students
prefer gaining experience and excellence by using their creativity. Being good at non academic
activities is often looked down upon. when in reality sometimes it takes so much more effort to be good at sports or art. It Add a hyphen
non-academic
require
physical dedication Change the verb form
requires
as well as
a strong mind. Schools
need to start viewing both as the same and reward students
for everything they achieve.
That is
why i
think that it doesn't matter what subject Change the capitalization
I
a
someone is good at or how creative a Correct article usage
apply
student
can be. It matters on
how a school can include both successes and reward them equally. We should start supporting the future leaders of the world in every positive Change preposition
apply
aspects
and not only Change to a singular noun
aspect
student
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