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Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all time, even on holidays. Does this development have more advantages than disadvantage

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Few coworkers want to be available to connect with with their
empoloyees
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employees
member
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members
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 at every movement, on a week off. Nowadays technology has become more advanced in
this
 part of the corporate sector which
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 more advantages than disadvantages, In
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 essay I will discuss both
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side
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.
As in
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this
 internet Environment,it's easy to do
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women and they can contact
with
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their boss from anywhere by staying with their family,In some emergency
work
 too,
this
technic
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making
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work
 sector more faster and avoiding the more consumssion to go process smoothly. I can connect the person in the
forign contries
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foreign countries
 can talk with in a second.
however
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 are some
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,
becase
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because
 of
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 development, people are not getting their privet time to spend with family which is giving mantal pressure
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 the person sometimes.
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dificult
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difficult
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 balance for them.
To conclude
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, I will say
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enovation
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renovation
innovation
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 there own
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demarits
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demerits
 but more merits
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all over the
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Task Response
Ensure that your essay fully addresses the given topic and provides a clear stance on whether the development has more advantages or disadvantages. Incorporate relevant examples to support your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the organization and coherence of your essay by structuring it with clear introduction and conclusion paragraphs. Use transition words and phrases to link your ideas and create a logical flow.
Lexical Resource
Diversify your vocabulary and use appropriate terms to express your ideas. Avoid repetitive word choices and consider using more advanced vocabulary to enhance your lexical resource.
Grammatical Range
Work on improving your grammar to ensure accurate sentence structures and verb tenses. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, verb conjugation, and sentence formation.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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