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The graph below shows unemployment levels in Ireland and the number of people leaving the country between 1988 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features of the graph, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows unemployment levels in Ireland and the number of people leaving the country between 1988 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features of the graph, and make comparisons where relevant.
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give
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 information about the
porpotion
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portion
proportion
 of
unemployment
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the unemployment
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rate
 Irish nation and
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the migiration
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migiration
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migration
 of them between 1988 and 2008.
Overall
, the percentage of
unemployment
 which was
approximetely
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approximately
 17% in 1988
decrease
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 by 11% in 2008. In 1988, 60000 people left their country
while
 the
unemployment
 percentage was
in
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at
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 the
hightes
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highest
higher
rate
. After
that
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 it experienced a slight
fell
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 to just above 55000 in 1990 and
then
 sharply decreased to
approximetely
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approximately
35000
whereas
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the unemployment
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unemployment
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the unemployment
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rate
 faced
flactuation
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fluctuation
fluctuations
 until 1992 and fell
signifecntly
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significantly
 to just under 6% in 2000.
Moreover
, the number
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of migiration
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migiration
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migration
 folks from 1994 went down until 2004 which stood
approximetly
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approximately
 at 27000. In 2002, the number of Irish people who left their hometown
inceased
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decreased
 again but from 2004 it shot a rocket to 50000 in 2008.
On the other hand
,
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 percentage
remaind
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remained
remains
 at
same
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the same
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rate
 with a
little
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small
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 increase to 6% in 2008.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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