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The map below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided maps depict the current and future city plans of
Islip
. The
detail
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 visuals demonstrate
the
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 general public the future development of
Islip
.
According to
 the graphics, there will be an expansion of
city
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the city
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 area at the expense of the greenery from
countryside
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the countryside
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 and
park
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parks
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. The additional land supply - from the exploitation of the northern countryside - can
accomodate
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accommodate
 new public facilities,
such
 as bus
station
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stations
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, shopping
center
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centre
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, car
park
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parks
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 and new housing estates.
Menwhile
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Meanwhile
, a new
neighbouhood
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neighbourhood
 is constructed utilizing some of the existing leisure park areas.
Furthermore
, a dual carriageway will encompass the whole
Islip
 region to enhance the mobility of residents. In conclusion, land is a
scarced
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scarce
 resource which the development of
Islip
 is going to utilize the idled greenbelt.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words islip with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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