The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region

The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region
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The given bar graph illustrates the data about the population and wealth percentage among different regions globally. 
Overall
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, the highest population is seen in China
whereas
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Asia
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Asia's
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pacefic
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pacific
has the lowest
percent
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. The global wealth distribution is at
peak
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its peak
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in North America and least in India. China
being
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the highest among all regions constitutes approximately 22%
while
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Asia
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Asia's
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pacefic
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pacific
has the least
of
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at
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5%.
In contrast
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to
this
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others
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other
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countries are between the average like India, Europe has 15%. Africa at 10% rest of the American regions
accounts
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account
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below
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10%. The wealth distribution shows
high
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a high
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rise in North America with 32% followed by a
decrease
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decreasing
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trend with Europe at 30% and Rich Asia
pacefic
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pacific
at 25%
whereas
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the other countries account
below
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5%.
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