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There is moral essentially nowadays for the Valuable countries of the earth to support the lowest countries develop in terms of feeding the nation, study and health care.

There is
moral
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a moral
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 essentially nowadays for the Valuable
countries
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 of the earth to support the lowest
countries
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develop
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developed
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 in terms of feeding the nation, study and health care. One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is a lack of development special treatment,education and feeding. Now rich
countries
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 are beginning to figure
it
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apply
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out
this
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 issue in poor
countries
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.
Personally
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i
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I
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 tend to suppose that it will be the greatest way to support
economic
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economically
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 low
countries
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.
Firstly
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 it is well known that we live in
21
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the 21st
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 century,
century
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a century
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 of technology and medicine. What
i
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I
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 mean here is that
technology
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technological
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 progress in poor
countries
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 can upgrade study capacity,if
nation
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nations
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 are smart they
had
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have
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 enough possibilities to work prestige jobs.
For
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instance
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instance,
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i
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I
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 really believe if people are educated,they can grow up their
country
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country's
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economic
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economy
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 like ABC. An excellent case in
this
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 point is developing in all waysides,especially healthcare,feeding and education. On
other
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the other
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 hand,it can
also
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 be argued that two sides well and
low developed
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low-developed
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countries
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 will have fascinating experiences and opportunities.
That is
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 to
say
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say,
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 great experience exchanges between different cultures will continue growth not only in
educational
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an educational
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 way,
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however
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but
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 in medicine which has
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a directly
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directly
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direct
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 link with lifestyle. Health care is vital for our
society
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society's
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 qualities. Take for expound England and India which
has
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have
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 a
long term
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long-term
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 relationship history. England in
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last
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the last
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 centuries
give
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given
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 them vast majority of power, like new technologies,new infrastructure and education in several
sphere
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spheres
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. In conclusion,taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that for our common
future
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future,
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 it is necessary to assist each other despite all issues.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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