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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live Write an email to your friend. In your letter - describe where you lived when you were a student at the university - recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation - warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

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Dear Freind Sofia: It
was
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has been
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 a long time since we
had
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met and
catch
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caught
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 up so I am very
pleasant
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pleased
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 by your email and congratulations
for
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on
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 the
offered
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offer
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on
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of
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this
 course at my university. I
live
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lived
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 at
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a university
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university
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a university
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 residence When I was a student it was a resident building
has
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that had
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 three parts.
On
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One
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 for the male and the female and another one for academic staff .the female area was completely
comforatable
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comfortable
. where you will find your privacy. I recommend
to
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apply
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you to look for accommodation that
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is
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close to your college where you will attend the course .
Therefore
, it helps to save more of your budget and time.
In addition
, near to the main street in
Centre
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the Centre
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town
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of town
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there
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apply
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you will be
more safe
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safer
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 and close to the supermarket and a restaurant. Most of the
student
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students
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failed in
Verb problem
make
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 a mistake when choosing
theier
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their
 shelter
.they
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They
 never check the sanitation system of a resident and
also
 prefer to be far away from downtown why the coast is acceptable so they do not Think about transportation and the value
time
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of time
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. I hope my recommendation and
issues
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the issues
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 highlighted above helped you to choose a better accommodation. I am waiting to
hearing
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hear
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 back from you. Sincerely yours
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear introduction and conclusion to the letter.
coherence cohesion
Organize the ideas in each paragraph more effectively.
lexical resource
Expand on vocabulary and use more varied expressions.
grammatical range
Pay attention to verb tenses and sentence structures.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dormitories
  • rental agreements
  • house-hunting
  • budgeting
  • commute
  • utilities
  • security deposit
  • lease
  • proximity
  • amenities
  • landlord
  • tenant rights
  • real estate agent
  • furnished/unfurnished
  • flatmates
  • on-campus/off-campus living
  • viewings
  • public transportation
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