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Some people believe that tourist should accept social and environmental responsibility while other believe that tourists should not accept any responsibility at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #tourist #responsibility #tourists
It is formally acknowledged that tourism is a
ubiqutous
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ubiquitous
 evidence all over the globe.
However
, sometimes it can lead to
the
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cultural conflicts
in
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 different
ethnics
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 groups or devastating ancient monuments. Who is to blame? In
this
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 I am trying to justify
this
 trend. There is an underlying assumption that sometimes monuments,
parcs
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parks
 or historical buildings have to be reconstructed after uncontrolled visiting of
the
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tourists
. First and foremost, people who want to visit some interesting places have to be informed in what manner they have behaved. Unfortunately, not many places with affluent history are observed in
necessary
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 manner by the government. To
exempify
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exemplify
, many monuments in Latin America are
in
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 the edge of
anihillation
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annihilation
due to
the
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tourists
. It is simply almost impossible to give
adequate
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 level of defence because of the poor
economical
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 situation of local cities and I
am
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utterly
believed
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 that in
this
 type of situation,
tourists
 should have taken all the responsibility.
On the other hand
, there is no shadow of doubt that in the contemporary era possibilities for travelling abroad are infinite. For the time being,
person
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the person
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 who has enough funds can travel all over the globe without difficulties
due to
 the up-to-date advances in transport.
Consequently
, it seems easy to take a picture of all someone wants, but it could
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 some tribes in Amazonia and it started to be dangerous for a moment. Naturally,
responsibilty
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responsibility
 for some challenging things like that
lied
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 not for the group of
tourists
 but
on
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 the tour guide, who has to know
such
 things and must share
this
 knowledge with his group. In conclusion,
apparantly
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apparently
,
responsibilty
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responsibility
responsible
 for some issues could have appeared ought to be divided between people who want to travel
as well as
 the government which provides
this
 opportunity. On the grounds that each medal always has two sides.
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