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The plans show Ashford in 2010 and Ashford now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

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The maps illustrate the change from 2010 to now in
Ashford
.
Overall
, residential areas have significantly improved
while
 the forested land has expanded. In 2010, there was a housing area, which was located
north east
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northeast
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 of
Ashford
. The transportation between the
city
 and
Ashford
 occurred by only ferryboat through passing
River
 Tam.The
river
 aligned from
nort
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north
 east of
Ashford
 to
south west
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south-west
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 of the town. The
city
 road divided west of
Ashford
 into two
part
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parts
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 and the north area had a forest.
On the other hand
, the south lot had nothing. More than a decade later,
Ashford
have
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has
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 developed noticeably until now. Single houses
at
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in
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 north east have increased and multi-storey apartments have
built
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been built
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 near the
river side
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riverside
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. A bridge has
constructed
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been constructed
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 passes through the
river
 and
yacht
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a yacht
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 marina established
at
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apply
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south of
Ashford
. Eventually,
seamless
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a seamless
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 driving road has launched from the residential area to the
city
. The vaccant lot
had
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apply
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placed
the
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on the
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 south of
city
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the city
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 road
have
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has
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demonstared
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demonstrated
 a forestation activity.
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task response
The essay provides a complete response to the task, as it summarizes the main features of the maps and makes relevant comparisons. However, the ideas could be more comprehensively developed.
coherence cohesion
The logic structure of the essay is generally clear, as it presents information about the 2010 map and then describes the changes in the present. However, the introduction and conclusion could be better developed to provide a stronger framework for the essay.
lexical resource
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses appropriate terminology to describe the maps. However, there is room for improvement in using more varied and precise vocabulary.
grammatical range
Overall, the essay shows a good command of grammar with mostly accurate sentence structures. However, there are some errors in verb tenses and sentence construction that could be improved.

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