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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or rain between 1970 and 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or rain between 1970 and 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The
graph
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 below illustrates the
number
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 of
people
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 that use three different types of transportation in the UK from 1970 to 2030. overview, the
car
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 was the most used transportation in 1970 and predictably more citizens in the UK to use the
car
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 to travel in 2030. The
bus
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 was the second favourite transport method but between 2010 to 2020, the train started to gain more attention and eventually, in 2030, it is the second most picked transport to travel. In 1970, 2
million
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, 4
million
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, and 5
million
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people
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 picked train,
bus
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, and
car
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 respectively as their main options
reach
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to reach
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 their destinations. In a 10-year period, three graphs showed stability and starting from 1980,
car
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 users rose rapidly and by 2000 it had reached 7
million
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 users.
Then
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 from 2000 to 2010, the
graph
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 is stable and eventually started to slowly rise until it is predicted that an estimated 9
million
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 cars
people
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 commute using
the
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a
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 vehicle. For buses, starting from 1980, the
graph
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 has shown a decline in the
number
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 of passengers and approximately only 2
million
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people
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 that commute by
bus
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.
This
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 is the lowest point for commuters during the 30-year period. In 2000, the train had gained around 3
million
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 passengers every day and that
number
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 was the same until 2010. From there, the
number
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keep
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keeps
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 growing fast
at
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to
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 the point it has surpassed the
bus
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's
graph
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 and
keeps
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 increasing to around 5
million
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 users in 2030.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, number, people, car, bus, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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