People's shopping habits depend on the age group they belong to than other factors. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?
Who is in a hectic schedule, mostly like a thing is shopping. There is an argument
people's
shopping Correct word choice
that people's
habits
depend on their age other than any factors
. In Correct word choice
other factors
this
essay, I would like to say my choice, Which is agree
without Fix the infinitive
to agree
disagree
.
To commence with, everybody who Wrong verb form
disagreeing
are
living on Change the verb form
is
this
planet mostly prefer
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prefers
thing is
buying whether any other Verb problem
apply
habits
like eating,sleeping,traveling and collecting items. Moreover
, if we look at, Why this
is more famous, We have various answers for this
. Because online
shopping,home delivery system and a plethora of collection attract Correct word choice
Online
customers
mind. As an adult woman, If I can Change noun form
customers'
customer's
control
my mind to buy or not our kids do not control
it. They can not control
it because they have
not great thinking Add a missing verb
do have
pattern
like adults.Kids always go shopping with their parents and can Fix the agreement mistake
patterns
control
them after checked
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checking
the
Change the word
their
wallet
. If mothers do not have money, kid's ideas do not bloom.
Indeed, We have Fix the agreement mistake
wallets
been became
young, adults and old we can Wrong verb form
become
get
decisions. After Verb problem
make
the
18 Correct article usage
apply
years
someone Add a comma
years,
choose
their career and Change the verb form
chooses
they
can get Correct pronoun usage
apply
monthly
payment. So Add an article
a monthly
the monthly
that
the most preferable age Correct word choice
apply
most
of them Add a missing verb
is most
addict
to shopping. In that time period Replace the word
addicted
youngers
hearts Replace the word
young people's
stole
by some major items. For Wrong verb form
were stolen
an
instance, they love Correct article usage
apply
to
mobiles, clothes, Change preposition
apply
jewelleries
, watches and perfumes. Not only that but Change the wording
jewellery
pieces of jewellery
also
some technical instruments which help to their day to day choes
. Correct your spelling
chores
shoes
Although
it is not a mistake of
Change preposition
for
new
generation, it Correct article usage
the new
also
a marketing trick.By comparing Add a missing verb
is also
another
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another habit
other habits
habits
, most of that
can not Correct pronoun usage
them
show
to others. Wrong verb form
be shown
Therefor
, buying is more Correct your spelling
Therefore
demand
in Change preposition
in demand
this
era among the youngest.
In conclusion, We can select our choices, even a habit and; habits
are different one to
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apply
one
by the way, shopping is one of them and most of the youngest love online or go to shops and buy varieties.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
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