People's shopping habits depend on the age group they belong to than other factors. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

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Who is in a hectic schedule, mostly like a thing is shopping. There is an argument
people's
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that people's
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shopping
habits
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depend on their age other than any
factors
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other factors
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. In
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essay, I would like to say my choice, Which is
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to agree
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without
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disagreeing
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. To commence with, everybody who
are
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is
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living on
this
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planet mostly
prefer
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thing is
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buying whether any other
habits
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like eating,sleeping,traveling and collecting items.
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, if we look at, Why
this
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is more famous, We have various answers for
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.
Because online
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Online
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shopping,home delivery system and a plethora of collection attract
customers
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customers'
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mind. As an adult woman, If I can
control
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my mind to buy or not our kids do not
control
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it. They can not
control
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it because they
have
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do have
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not great thinking
pattern
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patterns
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like adults.Kids always go shopping with their parents and can
control
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them after
checked
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checking
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the
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their
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wallet
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wallets
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. If mothers do not have money, kid's ideas do not bloom. Indeed, We have
been became
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become
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young, adults and old we can
get
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make
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decisions. After
the
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apply
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18
years
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years,
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someone
choose
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chooses
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their career and
they
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apply
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can get
monthly
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a monthly
the monthly
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payment. So
that
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apply
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the most preferable age
most
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is most
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of them
addict
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addicted
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to shopping. In that time period
youngers
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young people's
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hearts
stole
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were stolen
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by some major items. For
an
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apply
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instance, they love
to
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apply
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mobiles, clothes,
jewelleries
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jewellery
pieces of jewellery
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, watches and perfumes. Not only that but
also
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some technical instruments which help to their day to day
choes
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chores
shoes
.
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it is not a mistake
of
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for
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new
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the new
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generation, it
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also
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is also
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a marketing trick.By comparing
another
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another habit
other habits
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habits
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, most of
that
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them
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can not
show
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be shown
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to others.
Therefor
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Therefore
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, buying is more
demand
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in demand
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in
this
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era among the youngest. In conclusion, We can select our choices, even a habit and;
habits
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are different one
to
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apply
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one
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apply
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by the way, shopping is one of them and most of the youngest love online or go to shops and buy varieties.
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coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas in a clear and coherent manner, using appropriate paragraphing and linking devices.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use more precise and sophisticated words and phrases to express your ideas.
grammatical range
Work on improving your sentence structure and grammar to avoid errors and enhance clarity.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption patterns
  • digital natives
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar stores
  • target demographic
  • disposable income
  • consumer behavior
  • market segmentation
  • purchasing power
  • retail therapy
  • brand loyalty
  • impulse buying
  • price-sensitive
  • cross-generational
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