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The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009. The second graph shows the percentage of trains running on time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009. The second graph shows the percentage of trains running on time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first line graph illustrates how many people
travelling
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 by train during a 9-year
period
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 from 2000 to 2009,
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 the other shows the proportion of punctual
trains
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.
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, there were many significant changes during
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period
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. Both the number of train
travelers
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 and the rate of
trains
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 running on time as opposed to the target pretty dramatically increased. It can be clearly observed from the first chart that there were around 40
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 commuters using
trains
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 in the year 2000.
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 there was a slight increase to nearly 45
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 in the number of people going by train in 2002, which was followed by the lowest point of roughly 35
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 one year later. After two years, it reached a peak of approximately 50
billion
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travelers
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 before decreasing
of
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 five
billion
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 in the
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 year. In terms of the other graph, 92% of
trains
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 running on time in comparison with their target. After the following four years, it substantially rose to 96%, but later
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 rate considerably fell
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 4%, which was the same as it was in 2000.
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,
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 figure of
trains
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 being punctual saw a significant growth to 97%, which was the peak during
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period
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, before levelling off
in
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 the end of the
period
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 of time.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, trains, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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