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Nowadays , there are a large number of coffee shops and fast food vendors on high streets and in town cities.

#coffee #shops #food #vendors #streets #town #cities
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this
 modern
society
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 everyone wants to do
everthing
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everything
 fast and their patience level is very low when compared to the previous generation.
This
 has
also
 paved
way
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the way
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to
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for
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 the development
in
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of
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food
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the food
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 industry to innovate fast
foods
. Nowadays most of the younger generation are addicted to fast
food
 and
coffee
.
This
 has helped to increase the number of fast
food
vendors
 and
coffee
shop
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shops
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 in high streets and town centre.
This
 fast
food
are
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is
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comparetively
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comparatively
 cheap than other
foods
.
This
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This food
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foods
 can be cooked faster and tasty.The
coffe
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coffee
shop
also
 helps the younger generation to spend quality time with their friends.Most of the youngsters and elderly people go to
coffee
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a coffee
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shop
 to spend their time with their friends.The
coffee
shop
also
 helps us to improve the productivity level.There are many fast
food
vendors
 in the surrounding which helps us to buy
food
 quickly. As there are many merits about the fast
food
 and
the
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coffee
 and
also
hast
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has
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 its demerits.The
ingridents
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ingredients
 that are used in making
the
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fast
food
is
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are
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 not good for
health
.The caffeine
that is
 present is not good if consumed more.The fast
food
vendors
doesn't
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don't
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 maintain proper
hygine
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hygiene
 which
cause
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causes
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health
issuses
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issues
.Some of the
vendors
 use
the
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old stocks which
sometimes
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are sometimes
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 rotten
which
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and
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 cause
food
poisioning
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poisoning
.In some
wrost
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worst
cases
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cases,
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this
 puts our
life
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lives
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 in danger.Not all the
vendors
 use the old stocks some of them maintain proper
hygine
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hygiene
 and good flavour.We must try to consume
food
 in
such
 places .But we must always be
consious
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conscious
 about our
health
 which is more important.As the consumers of
the
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fast
food
 have
also
 increased the
vendors
 have
also
been
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increased.The
coffe
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coffee
 must
also
 be limited
according to
 our
health
 conditions. Nowadays the
food
vendors
 are huge in number and the
foods
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food
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are
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is
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 relatively cheaper compared to other hotels.As considering our
heakth
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health
 we must limit the consumption of fast
food
.If it is consumed in small
amount
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amounts
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 it doesn't affect our
health
.We shall always try to consume in
way
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a way
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 which doesn't affect our
health
.
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