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Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: • explain what you are currently doing • describe your suitability for this area of work • say when you can attend an interview

#restaurant #job #suitability #area #work #interview
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing you
this
 letter to express my keen interest in the position that you are offering at the River Side Restaurant. I have been working with culinary since I moved to
this
 town, five years ago. I am a professional cook, and my current position is general chef at the Japan Restaurant
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downtown. I understand
that is
 time for me to face new challenges, and your restaurant would be perfect for a new start. I strongly believe that I am more than suitable for
this
 position
,
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 since I have a
large
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lot of
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experiance
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experience
 with seafood.
Furthermore
, I studied oriental culinary in Japan, and it
gaves
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gives
gave
 me wide knowledge about seafood in general. Would be a pleasure to meet with you in person and discuss
further
 plans, I could clarify any additional questions that you have. I am available anytime
fom
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from
 1 p.m. to 8
p.m
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p.m.
, Monday to Friday. Please find attached my Resume, I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Lucas Campos
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to address the recipient properly. Instead of using 'Dear Sir or Madam', try to find out the name of the person you are addressing the letter to.
task achievement
Provide more specific information about your current role as a general chef at the Japan Restaurant and how it has prepared you for the position at the River Side Restaurant.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to showcase your skills and qualifications.
grammatical range
Be mindful of the grammatical accuracy, particularly the use of articles and prepositions.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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