More and more people buy a wide range of household goods like television sets, microwave ovens and rice cookers. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In modern times lots of new
equipments
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equipment
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are bought by many
people
for several reasons like rice cookers, tv set,
micriwawe
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microwave
ovens. Many individuals claim it has
positive
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affect
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effect
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whereas
others discuss
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the negative
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sides
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issue. I strongly believe
people
can use it for different worthy reasons.  First of all, sometimes it makes
people
more
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lazier than normal cases and it
creastes
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creates
sedentary
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life for them. They do not spend any time or effort
whereas
a
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modern goods make everything very
easily
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for them.
In other words
, it
make
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a piece of cake for
people
.
For instance
, there are some kitchen appliances that it is enough to add every
parts
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part
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from recipes and it will make
a delicious meals
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a delicious meal
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.
As a result
,
people
do not do anything except
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ingredients.
Secondly
, it has a big advantage for
people
who work and do not have time for cooking or cleaning. One of the recent inventions
about
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home cleaning is
robot
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a robot
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which cleans and mops
all
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the
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house itself. You just need to turn on
this
equipment and
that is
all. it will clean
all
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house and finish
for
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several hours. As in consequence, it will make
people
's work much easier and
increas
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increase
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the standart
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standart
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standard
of living. After a long, tired day they do not need to clean
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the house
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again. In conclusion, these types of goods
take place
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an important role in our lives. We can not deny their
effors
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efforts
effort
for us. The most vital point is to use them in balance and
do
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not allow
to
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them to
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make us lazy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household goods
  • television sets
  • microwave ovens
  • rice cookers
  • positive development
  • increased convenience
  • efficiency
  • improved standard of living
  • more choices
  • options
  • negative development
  • environmental impact
  • consumerism
  • materialism
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