the table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies bewteeb 1975 and 2015.
The table below illustrates the proportion of
collaboration
of females in senior management in Eldan
, Bamforth
and Finsbury
Ltd company
during four decades.
It is clear that
the most participation of women
was in Eldan
company
that during years increased significantly while
females were lowest
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the lowest
collaboration
in Finsbury
company
.
In detail, in 1975 female employees who participated in senior management in Finsbury
Company
accounted for 16 per cent
. In contrast
, only 3 per cent
of women
collaborate for Eldan
company
and 9 per cent
for Bamforth
Ltd. In 1980, the collaboration
of women
in Bamforth
and Finsbury
increased by 2 per cent
whereas
in Eldan
remained unchanged. However
, in 1985, the participation of women
in Eldan
grew by 11 per cent
while
,
the two other companies increased by Remove the comma
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2per
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2 per
cent
.
Finally
, the collaboration
of females in the Eldan
department rose dramatically between 1990 and 2015 from 28 per cent
reached 64 per cent
. Otherwise
, participation of individuals in Finsbury
during 15 years increased just by 10 per cent
and collaboration
in Bamforth
organization reached from 15 per cent
to 46 per cent
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