The map below show the changes that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.

The map below show the changes that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.
The map demonstrates the development that happened to Willington
town
in 1780, 1860 and 2000.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
town
had
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changed tremendously. From a
land
that only consisted of a vast
land
to a busting rural area as public infrastructure has been built
while
the river remained unchanged. Looking
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map for more detail, at the starting point which was 1780, Willington only had 100 homes and 4 lands for
agriculture
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purposes.
Consequently
, there had been an uprise in population as
number
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of housing had
been
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doubled for the
last
nearly a decade.
Moreover
, those
number
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had jumped nearly triple the amount from just 200 home ownerships to 500. On top of that, many public buildings had
also
joined with the population's blooming trends
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when the
town
began as a farming-focused
town
to a reforming residential
town
for future comers to live. in 1860 the farming
land
had been cut down 2 lands and connected the county with a road to the outside and eventually by 2000 the
land
of Willington was busting with other public infrastructures
such
as schools with many sports fields,
shops
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and the introduction of wetland for birds.
Moreover
, those types of buildings were built above the area that used to be covered by
woods
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, land with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • town
  • changes
  • occurred
  • 1780
  • 1860
  • 2000
  • map
  • show
  • named
  • Willington
  • introduction
  • overview
  • comparison
  • conclusion
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