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The maps below show the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighbouring town, since 1962.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighbouring town, since 1962.
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The illustration underneath compares the major
developements
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developments
 that took place in Meadowside
village
 and a city adjoining it named Fonton during 1962, 1985 and
present
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 year.
Overall
, it can be inferred that the
village
 grew in area over the timeline,
finally
 coalescing with the town. A railway connection and a roadway
has
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 been built for better connectivity. In 1962, Meadowside and Fonton were two
seperate
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separate
 destinations
where
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the former had only
road
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a road
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 connection intersecting the location,
whereas
latter
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the latter
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 only had railway services. With the passage of
time
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time,
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 the
village
 grew in terms of area and had two roads, one following the earlier stated route and
other
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the other
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 connecting it to the adjacent city.
Along with
this
, a housing estate and a leisure complex
was
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 constructed on the left side of the road with a
super store
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superstore
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 located exactly opposite
to
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the estate. Currently, the
village
 is known as Meadowside suburbs and both
the
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locations have coalesced into a big
one
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area. There is a railway station constructed in the centre of the location, connecting the suburb to the city. A new hotel is erected behind the station and a business park opposite
to
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it.
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