In recent years, the number of children participating in sports and other physical activities has decreased. Identify some of the resulting problems and state ways to address them.

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generation, nowadays shows less interest in
sports
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. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will be discussing the problems responsible for
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. To commence with , the first problem which
children
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faces
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is
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more use of smartphones. Nowadays, technology
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adversely affected the mental health of kids. They prefer playing
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in
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smartphones rather than playing
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.
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, these days
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after returning from
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a school
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play
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on
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,
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and playstations
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playstations
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, earlier in
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days we
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to play
games
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like cricket , football and other physical
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after returning from school. So, these technologies have
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decreased
the interest
of
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playing
sports
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in
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children
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.
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,
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food is
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one
such
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problem.
Junk
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foods are responsible for increasing obesity in a child. They are so addictive that they badly affect
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's health both physically
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mentally.
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types of food have ingredients responsible for instability and
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one's ability to think for their physical fitness.
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, a child who takes a healthy diet is more conscious about fitness as compared to a child who prefers
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food over a healthy diet.
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,
Unhealthy
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diet is
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decreasing
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the number
of
children
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participating in
sports
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.
According to
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me, Motivation can play a key role in increasing interest
for
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sports
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in
children
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. Motivation can be anything like getting inspired
from
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athletes or getting motivated
from
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colleagues. In conclusion, Smartphones and
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Foods
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are the major problems responsible for decreasing the number of
children
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taking part in
sports
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