In recent years, the number of children participating in sports and other physical activities has decreased. Identify some of the resulting problems and state ways to address them.

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generation, nowadays shows less interest in

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. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will be discussing the problems responsible for

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more use of smartphones. Nowadays, technology

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adversely affected the mental health of kids. They prefer playing

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smartphones rather than playing

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, these days

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after returning from

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play

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, earlier in

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days we

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to play

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like cricket , football and other physical

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after returning from school. So, these technologies have

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decreased

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playing

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children

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food is

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one

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problem.

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foods are responsible for increasing obesity in a child. They are so addictive that they badly affect

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's health both physically

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mentally.

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types of food have ingredients responsible for instability and

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one's ability to think for their physical fitness.

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, a child who takes a healthy diet is more conscious about fitness as compared to a child who prefers

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food over a healthy diet.

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Unhealthy

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diet is

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decreasing

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the number

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participating in

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me, Motivation can play a key role in increasing interest

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sports

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children

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. Motivation can be anything like getting inspired

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athletes or getting motivated

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colleagues. In conclusion, Smartphones and

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Foods

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are the major problems responsible for decreasing the number of

children

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taking part in

sports

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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249 words

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In recent years, the number of children participating in sports and other physical activities has decreased. Identify some of the resulting problems and state ways to address them.

Your opinion

The availability of entertainment such as video games on handheld devices are harmful to individuals and to the society, they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the past, lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students in a classroom. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach to teaching?

In most cities and towns, the high volumes of road traffic have become a problem. What are the causes and what actions could be taken to solve the problem?

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.