The chart shows the main methods of transportation for people travelling to a university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
The pie chart depicts the main methods of transportation for folk travelling to a university for work or study from 2004 to 2009 in the UK.
Overall
, it is noticeable that in 2004 car
obtained the highest percentage of transportation, Fix the agreement mistake
cars
while
the
train
lowest. Furthermore
, in 2009 car
became unpopular and was replaced by bus
which had the largest proportion , whereas
train
remained lowest in the period given.
To begin
with
2004, Change preposition
in
train
accounted for 3 % which is 3 times smaller than Fix the agreement mistake
trains
bicycle
(9%). Fix the agreement mistake
bicycles
However
, train
was Add an article
the train
a train
type
of transport which was less used over the period in question. Add an article
the type
a type
Therefore
, car
obtained 51 % roughly, Fix the agreement mistake
cars
while
bus
only 33 %. In terms of walking, it had only 4 %.
With regards to 2009, Fix the agreement mistake
buses
bus
accounted for 46 % which is eight times bigger than walking (6%).
Moreover
, bus
was the type of transportation which Add an article
the bus
always
used. Add a missing verb
was always
Moreover
, train
had 4 %, Fix the agreement mistake
trains
whereas
car
obtained 28 % roughly. Fix the agreement mistake
cars
Consequently
, bicycle
obtained only 16 % in the period given.Fix the agreement mistake
bicycles
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, train, bus with synonyms.
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