the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average australian household. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average australian household. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first pie chart illustrates what an average Australian family
used
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energy
for, and the second pie chart indicates
proportion
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the proportion
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of produced gas
due to
consumption
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the consumption
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of
energy
.
Overall
, an average Australian family
used
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uses
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more than
two-third
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two-thirds
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of the
energy
for heating and water heating, and around half of the emitted greenhouse gases
were
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are
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a result of these
energy
uses. Australians consumed the highest
proportion
of
energy
for heating, and the second
high
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highest
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proportion
for water heating, 42% and 30% respectively. Interestingly, despite being the main purpose of
energy
use, the percentage of gas emitted
as a result
of
energy
consumption for heating was the third
large
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largest
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proportion
, after 32% for water heating and 28% for other appliances.
On the other hand
,
lowest
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the lowest
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amount of
energy
was used for cooling, lighting, and refrigeration with 2%, 4%, and 7% respectively. Among the
last
three,
energy
used for refrigeration was the most pollutive, with
the
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a
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14% share of emitted gas,
while
the pollution share for cooling and lightning
where
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were
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3% and 8% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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